I’ve missed you guys! Today i hit send on another novel, so i thought i’d share a bit and see what you-all think. And if the story gets a little “on sub” luck out of the deal, so much the better.
These are the first 10 sentences so i’ll hold off on an intro for now, but will warn you that this is an unedited snippet, best read while squinting. 🙂
It had been a while since the last time a moving vehicle hit me, but I wasn’t in the mood to take chances. The night was dark—no moon and only a smattering of stars peeking between the clouds, but at least the rain had stopped—and even though the county road I walked along was flat I’d just passed a blind turn. A blind turn the locals had been known to straighten now and then, especially when the weekend and low visibility coincided.
I ran toward the neighbor’s fence, their patched fence with a boulder guarding the apex of the turn, and hoped whoever sat behind the wheel didn’t mean to run me down. The way my luck was going that night, with the unexpected rain and Granddad’s truck quitting, it surprised me when the car stopped and I still stood upright.
The GTO, the 1964 stock GTO that I knew to be deep purple but looked black just then, rocked gently and then settled. It rocked again when he leaned across the seat to roll the window down. Even if he’d seen the truck he wouldn’t know who I was. He’d left town before we moved here, and only one thing about me is at all noteworthy anyway. Everyone knew the day he came back to town.
Thanks for reading!
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Really nice way to hook the readers in!
Thanks, P.T.! 🙂
Very intriguing beginning, Charley. I liked the description of the curve. 🙂
Thanks, Siobhan! 🙂
Wow, so much of this grabbed me and wouldn’t let go! I love all the subtle hints and foreshadowing. Really looking forward to reading more!
Thanks, Joyce! 🙂
Great opening. You have me wanting to know more. 🙂
Thanks for reading, Jennifer! 🙂
Yeah, I’m hooked. Now I need the details, please. The who, what, when and where.
Thanks, Laurie! I’ll do a proper intro for my next snippet. 🙂
The whole discussion of the curve was terrific and I’m intrigued by the comment that she hasn’t been hit by a vehicle in a long time…excellent excerpt.
Thanks, Veronica! ❤
I’m intrigued. Great way to hook the reader with subtle hints of much more. I can’t wait to see how it all unfolds. By the way, welcome back!
Thanks, Karen, it’s great to be back! 🙂
Good to have you back. I missed your stories … and you got me hooked on today’s already 🙂
Thanks, Iris! 🙂
it doesn’t seem like the safest place to walk by.
Not in the dark, that’s for sure. Thanks for commenting, Linda! 🙂
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