The Broken Cup

Welcome to this weekend’s snippetry!

Today’s snippet is another tease from my Don’t Read in the Closet story, Better Than New (someone guessed correctly,so I can use the title now :)) and continues where last week’s leaves off. We’re still with Theo and Ben in the coffeehouse. You can catch up here. The first line is Ben’s but all the strange punctuation is mine.

“Okay, now break it; throw it over there.” He pointed to the dip in the tiled floor where a grate covered a hole; the building used to be some kind of factory or warehouse, so the coffeehouse had all kinds of odd little details like that.

“It’ll make a mess.”

“May I direct your attention to the sign above the door—it doesn’t say The Broken Cup for nothing, whose place is this?”

“Yours.”

“So throw the cup onto the grate as hard as you can.” He pushed my shoulder gently and nodded toward the grate. “Stop thinking about it and do it.”

Thanks for reading!

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18 thoughts on “The Broken Cup

  1. I like the way Ben thinks, lol. And the name of the place. That place would have so many broken cups if I worked there… Anyway, great snippet. I like both of these characters and the interaction is great.

    BTW, we can use our titles if they have been guessed already? And you guessed mine! 😀

  2. Bless Ben—sometimes breaking something harmless is exactly what we need to do to keep from breaking something important. He’s a keeper, all right. 😀

  3. That’s intriguing. And I love the last sentence: “Stop thinking about it and do it.” You left it on a cliffhanger, great choice of the 8 sentences. 🙂

  4. I love these two characters, especially Ben. And it’s been a while since I read it, so I may be wrong in this, but the breaking the cup thing reminds me of Callahan’s Cross Time Saloon. I seem to think they had a cup/glass breaking area too…

  5. Sometimes you need a little cathartic violence to ease the chaos inside. Great snippet, Charley, and now I want to find a sign that says “The Broken Cup.” 🙂

  6. Love the snippet–the conversation between the two is perfect. But now you got me thinking, why would anyone name a coffeehouse The Broken Cup? Is it a metaphor or an invitation?

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