Hello out there!
Here’s another snippet from The Color Story (which is still without a title, mainly because I’ve been too busy and too unhealthy to work on it this week—bad me!).
This is part of the original flash that inspired my 200 page novel. It was for a contest and the challenge was to tell a story with only dialogue. The judges weren’t wowed by my entry, but after almost a year and a half I almost have a novel.
Colin and Al are speaking for the first time, over the body of another guy who lived in their building. The first line is Colin’s.
“Crap, his tattoo just moved.”
“No, the flower.”
“The violet moved?”
“It slapped the cymbal, I heard it.”
“Some of these tats have mouths, it’d help if one of them named the killer.”
Thanks for reading!
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wow, am I intrigued by that excerpt.
Thanks Laurie! 🙂
My curiosity is peaked…talking tats.
Thanks, Evelise. This story is a complete 180 for me, so it’s nice to know it’s working. 😀
oh, bizarre! Intrigued to find out more. And good luck with finding a title! Sometimes those buggers are shifty 😉
Thanks, Thianna! Yeah, I have pages of ideas for titles, but none sound as good after I live with it as when I wrote it down…
Love dialogue and tats….but never heard of moving tats. *interest peaked*
Thanks for stopping by, ND!
It’s funny even though some one died. Is he having hallucinations or just making jokes?
It’s a Contemporary Paranormal, so you never know…
LOL. That would make crime-solving considerably easier, wouldn’t it? I love the moving tattoos. (And I hate naming things too. Good luck!)
It would! Too bad Al has to work for it like everyone else–can’t make things too easy, right? 🙂
Thanks for stopping by, Paula!
Wow! I think that’s a great opening, Charley. I’d love to read it!
( I know that a violet slapping a cymbal isn’t a euphemism in this, but it sounds like one! 😉 )
*lol* I like the way you think, Sarah! Thanks for visiting. 🙂
Sounds pretty cool Charley. Will your novel still be dialogue only or have you filled in with narration? I don’t think I’ve ever read an entire novel of dialogue only. I’m not sure how that would work. But, either way I’m intrigued
Thanks, Brynn! It’s not all dialogue anymore, only the original flash was. I’m only mean to my characters, not readers. 😉
LOL. Good to know.
Eerie, got the shivers over the moving tattoos! really an excellent excerpt, can’t wait for more.
Thanks, Veronica! I love that you think it’s eerie. 😀
Wow–they are all talk–nice, realistic dialogue.
oh those is entirely engaging- what where those silly judges thinking? And titles are rough- even in great health they stump me sometimes
Haha! I like it! Love their back and forth. Great job writing the dialogue. That last line is perfect!