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Welcome to this week’s snippet! It’s snowing outside but nice and cozy in here—where we get together to share 8 sentences of fiction.
This week I’ve started edits on the paranormal. It’s UF with mystery and romantic elements. I think. Since I haven’t chosen a title yet it’s going by The Color Story. This week’s snippet is sort of an introduction to the two MCs: Colin is 18 and just saw his first dead body a little while before this, and Al is a P.I. but his age is a mild spoiler so he doesn’t have to share it yet. 😀
Colin & Al live in the same building, but hadn’t spoken before that morning, over the body. Since this is Colin’s story, we’re in his POV.
Al pulled the door open and held it so Colin could leave. Colin stopped on the sidewalk and watched as Al went to the bus stop on the corner; it was on the way to the corner where he caught the bus to campus, so he stopped there too.
“You’re taking the bus into Old Town?”
“That’s right.”
“I thought you’d have a motorcycle.”
Al shrugged. “I could say something profound about not judging a book by its cover, but I’ll spare you.”
“You mean something cliché.”
Al laughed and the bus pulled up to the curb.
Thanks for reading!
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ETA: If anyone’s interested in previous snippets from this story, they can be found here, here, and here.
Love the snippet and the weather? snow and Ice, but at least I finally got power back.
Evelise
Thanks for dropping by, Evelise. I’m glad you have power back–hope you’re keeping warm!
Very nice snippet, Charley–we have snow and ice here (and cold). I went to work last Wednesday after the ice storm hit! Me and this other guy were the only two from our department to show up!
Thanks, Nancy! Hmm, maybe I shouldn’t have asked about everyone’s weather. Every time I read “snow & ice” I could swear the temperature in my office (a.,k.a. bedroom) goes down a little. *smh*
Yup, snow and ice. Curious about this P.I. Since it’s UF, would ancient be a good guess? *wink* Interested to know more.
Well, a guy’s gotta have some mystery, yeah? 😉 Thanks for commenting, Morticia. Stay warm!
Love the interaction between them. But now I am curious. Exactly how old is the PI?
Love a man with a motorcycle. Too bad he doesn’t have one.
ND
This is very interesting so far. love the snippet
Fun snippet!
Cold here, and somehow we went from “little to no accumulation” to getting 1 – 2″ of snow overnight and another 1 – 2 ” tomorrow…
Cliches are there because they’re acknowledged truths, right? lol Great snippet, Charley.
“Never judge a book by its cover. Unless it’s leatherbound.” 😀
The weather is too depressing for words. But this snippet brightened my evening, Charley—can’t wait to see what you do with a paranormal (I’ve only read your contemporaries so far) and where the ‘color’ part of ‘The Color Story’ comes in (auras?).
They seem to go along quite well, I wonder why they didn’t talk to each other before.
Cute teaser! 🙂
Cute exchange, Charley! I like the wit 🙂
We’re supposed to get ice. No fun.
Smooth dialog, very realistic. I like your characters, can’t wait for whatever happens next. Great snippet!
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