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Sorry for the delay—I do have a snippet for you this week. This is also from Joe & Kai’s story, but from Kai’s POV. The world has spoken, and it said it wants to know what’s going on in the minds of both players in a Romance. I aim to please, so I’m giving it a shot. Kai’s giving me a hard time—I suspect he thinks nobody cares what’s going on in his head. Only one cure for that, so I’m shoving him into the spotlight for 8 sentences.
This is from the beginning of the story, right after Joe returns home from surgery. Kai’s in his apartment next door. (I’d advise you squint a little when you read it so the errors won’t hurt so much.)
Those two, the Prescotts, are about as straight as they come. George wore a sport jacket to take Joe to the hospital—even he wouldn’t have gone home during the procedure to change. Probably kept his head bowed over an iSomething the whole time, too. But he noticed me, he always notices me, and not in the same way Joe does. No, George had me pegged from the gate. If I didn’t have thirty years of experience saying I knew better, the zealous way he stepped between us would’ve made me wonder.
But if I’m interested in Joey he has to be straight because that’s my m.o. Show me a hot straight guy—bonus points for each prejudice and phobia he brings to the table—and before you can say Judy Garland I’ve fallen for him.
Thanks for reading!
What do you think of the title “Not The Doctor”? I like the song, and Kai’s not a doctor but…
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Charley Descoteaux 
Sounds like another great read, can’t wait for it to get here.
Thanks, Laurie! I’m trying to whip it into shape. 🙂
“not the doctor”- I like it! and what a wonderfully detailed snippet! thanks for sharing
Thanks, Joelle! 😀
Oh the irony.
Dakota
Love the title–and the snippet, especially the last line. Haven’t heard of the song, but I’m not very hip.
Thanks, Nancy! You could just be too young–it’s from Jagged Little Pill, back when Alanis was still angry. 🙂
Thanks for commenting, Dakota! 🙂
Thanks for the compliment, Charley–nah I’m probably too old. LOL.
I wonder if he is heading for unrequited love or if he underestimate himself.
I love this! And I love the way Kai seems to be saying that he sets himself up for failure. (At least, that’s what I’m getting from it.)
Loved the ending paragraph! Wonderful imagery and I got his character immediately. You know you’re spot on when it only takes a few sentences to be completely there in the scene.
Great chemistry!
Nice 8!
Very visual scene. I want to read on.
Oh, Kai, honey . . . Just you wait. 😀
I love the last line—I can’t wait to see if he thinks, “Surrender Dorothy,” the next time he sees Joe.
Very interesting POV this character has, enjoyed the snippet very much!
I love this character’s voice… I can understand struggling with a character to get their POV right, but this guy immediately caught my attention 🙂 Awesome 8!