It’s a snippet!

Posted on August 17, 2013 by Charley Descoteaux

Okay, gang, here’s 8 more from SB. It’s the day after the water incident, and here we meet the guy who changes everything. He’s just surprised our earnest hero who’s back at work scanning documents (this time in the garage instead of the basement) and asked if it was okay for him to use the kitchen phone *cough* ruse *cough* and then asked for his name.

He took a slow deep breath and said it silently first. “Phil.”

“Hey, Phil, I’m Lee.”

He glanced up again and Lee’s smile wasn’t like anything he’d ever seen before. Patient; kind; happy. He’d arrived in the plumber’s truck, with his worn jeans and his surfer hair. Lee. Lee had laughed at Jerry’s silly story about the case that made him want to retire. He still wore that same smile when Phil tilted his head to the side just enough to see that his eyes were dark before returning his gaze to the floor beside his bare foot.

Thanks for reading!

I didn’t get with the program this week until Saturday was almost over but here’s a link to Seductive Studs & Sirens. You shouldn’t have to suffer when i fail.

Don’t forget to check out Weekend Writing Warriors and the Sunday Snippet crowd for more great tidbits of fiction!

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15 thoughts on “It’s a snippet!”

Linda Hamonou on August 18, 2013 at 1:11 am said:

Nice first interaction. Isn’t Phil going to answer something?

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- Charley Descoteaux on August 18, 2013 at 12:17 pm said:
  
  Thanks, Linda! 🙂
  
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FCEtier on August 18, 2013 at 5:04 am said:

The kind of smile everyone wants to see.
Especially when it’s someone of interest!
Nice 8.

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- Charley Descoteaux on August 18, 2013 at 12:18 pm said:
  
  Thanks for stopping by & commenting! 🙂
  
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sharonbuchbinder on August 18, 2013 at 5:44 am said:

Lee. Lee. Lee! Yup. He’s hooked! Nicely done!

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- Charley Descoteaux on August 18, 2013 at 12:19 pm said:
  
  Thanks, Sharon! 🙂
  
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Rayne Golay on August 18, 2013 at 11:08 am said:

I like his worn jeans and surfer hair. And the smile, the smile 🙂

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- Charley Descoteaux on August 18, 2013 at 12:20 pm said:
  
  Thanks, Rayne. I have to admit i’m a little in love with Lee. He’s turned out to be much more than i saw at the beginning. 🙂
  
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Sarah W on August 18, 2013 at 11:27 am said:

Hmmm . . . Did Phil know Lee would be his plumber? Or is this just a happy coincidence?

Who’s Jerry?

When will this be available?

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- Charley Descoteaux on August 18, 2013 at 12:22 pm said:
  
  *lol* I have to finish it first, Sarah! I’m hoping to send it out by the end of the year, though. 🙂
  
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veronicascott on August 18, 2013 at 3:48 pm said:

Loved the photo and of course I enjoyed the snippet. Can’t wait to see what happens next!

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Susan Deborah Schiller on August 18, 2013 at 3:49 pm said:

Great description of the smile! I like how your character is turning into someone you truly love!

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Karysa Faire on August 18, 2013 at 8:06 pm said:

That’s so beautiful and sweet. Lovely snippet!

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P.T. Wyant on August 19, 2013 at 9:49 am said:

Great description! And I agree with Sarah W — Who’s Jerry?

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