Thanks for coming to visit me on this lovely summer weekend. I hope all’s well in your corner of the world!
I know this looks long, but it’s really only 8 sentences. This is the beginning of Chapter 2 of A Sunday Kind of Love–wherein we get a peek behind the curtain at Mason (& one incidence of punctuation manipulation). Hopefully it’s self-explanatory, but I should’ve been in bed two hours ago so maybe not. If you need more of a lead-in, just holler. 🙂
Throughout the day Jake went over his solos, mentally preparing for what promised to be a fun show, only to be interrupted by thoughts of Mason; he pushed them aside as best he could and went on with his plans.
The club itself wasn’t anything special—a stage and a bar, round tables and a dance floor—but Jake had been a performer all his life and he played to every corner of that dim room by turns. Session work was a good living and a chance to add to his not-inconsiderable skills on a regular basis, but a room full of professional musicians couldn’t hope to compare with the rapt faces of an audience or the way his heart soared watching a dance floor fill. That night, the dance floor hadn’t cleared once during the first set and the second was following suit.
After his second solo, Jake noticed a man paying attention, sitting alone at a small table near the wall. He felt a flip-flopping in his chest, like a fish struggling to return to the sea, when he realized it was Mason. He wasn’t being daft, Mason almost looked like a different man sitting there with no product in his hair and wearing a plain black dress shirt. At the break Jake left his trumpet on a stand and made his way across the room, Mason’s eyes on him the whole time he said “hello” and thanked the folks who stopped him with compliments on his performance.
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Curious on what to happen next. 🙂
Thanks–i’m glad this snippet made you wonder! 🙂
What is it about a plain black dress shirt that makes me go NUMMIE?
I asked myself the same question, but am not really sure what it is. But yep, yum!
I really like the atmosphere in this snippet.
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Excellent of scene/atmosphere and good character reveal for Jake. Nicely done #8
Thanks for commenting, Susan! 🙂
Hey! I played trumpet in high school. And I love dark moody venues.
Thanks for stopping by and commenting! 🙂
Nice. I’m looking forward to Jake making it to Mason’s table.
I did get a little lost between the first and second paragraphs, though — getting ready for the day and suddenly in the middle of performing. But I’m tired so that could be why.
Thanks, P.T.! 🙂
I’m interested to know why Mason has let his mask slip.
Very intriguing. Good stuff!
Mason is edging closer . . . I hope Jake allows it, sooner rather than later, for his own sake.
Wow, Charley, amazing. This has so much going on; I can picture everything, but I also pick up on so many feelings also. And the snippet really is 8 sentences! Super nice job on this.
Thanks Marcia! I’m glad the feelings come through along with the pictures. 🙂
I like the way you take us into his musician’s world and show us his love for performing vs session work. It tells us a lot about his character.
Great showing of atmosphere. Hope I’ll get to see what happens when he gets to Mason.
Thanks so much! 🙂
If you really want to know you can pick up the story. I can’t give away too much for free or my publisher will be unhappy with me! 😉
Loved the way you described the confidence and enjoyment he had while playing Excellent excerpt!!
Thanks for your comment, Veronica! Maybe i should choose my snippets when I’m falling asleep at the keyboard more often. 😉
Nice job setting up the scene. I felt as though I was there! Good 8, Charley 🙂
Oh that’s hot without being over the top. Nicely done, Charley. I’m happy for Jake and I can feel his excitement. 🙂
I like how he never takes his eyes off Mason, even as he thanks admirers for the compliments. He is a man on a mission!