Variation on a theme

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wewriwa_buttonSince it is Christmas in July time, these sentences are from the opening of my holiday story, Toy Run. It’s on submission right now so hopefully posting a little something from it will be lucky and it’ll be accepted for this year’s Dreamspinner Advent Calendar.

Here’s something like a blurb—both it and the snippet are unedited, but hopefully that’s only temporary.

IAN BOWEN, former physical therapist and reluctant loner, has mastered the art of bad ideas that end in quick getaways. He’s good with people too, as long as the person in question isn’t a man with an invitation in his eyes. Ian’s looking for a man to inspire him to park his Harley for a while, but doesn’t have much hope of finding him. Ian took to the road after the death of his grandfather who raised him, and from his base in Northern California has been through most of the western states. He rides into Oregon for a Toy Run collecting donations for the local children’s hospital and the kids of deployed soldiers and finds more than a group of charitable bikers out for a good time.

Ian stops at a diner the morning of the run and meets ED GONZALEZ, another involuntary loner with a pile of toys lashed to his bike. Ian’s not sure whether Ed wants to fuck him or kick his ass, but he’s sure which he’d prefer.

It was a terrible idea, riding north. For the same five hundred miles I could be in Vegas or San Diego—but terrible ideas were sort of my specialty. Besides, if it all goes to hell I’ll just keep moving. Another specialty.

I backed-up to the curb, killed the engine and sat leaning against my pack. Hours early, again. It’s not easy to arrive fashionably late when you have nowhere else to be. I flipped the helmet visor up and glare from the fog and mist made me want to flip it back down.

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21 thoughts on “Variation on a theme

  1. Interesting snippet and character. Makes the reader want to know both what he is early for and where he is…and if he’ll run again this time or if life changes and he won’t. Nicely done.

    • Thanks for commenting Susan!

      I didn’t realize that in trying to make the “blurb” short I took out something so important as why Ian’s in that parking lot in the first place! *facepalm* I’ll go add it–it’s a Toy Run collecting for a local Children’s Hospital and the kids of deployed soldiers. Kinda important . . .

  2. Good luck on your submission, Charley. If you ever want help with blurbs, I’m pretty good with them. And I loved the line about “Hard to be fashionably late when you have nowhere to be.” Nice. 🙂

    • Thanks Siobhan — & thanks for your offer! I may take you up on that because I’m not as good as I’d like to be (obviously :)).

      Ian may be a rough-tough-burly biker, but he’s still conscious of how the other guys see him. 🙂

  3. If you have a Christmas story, be sure to let me know. I’ll be running Ana’s Advent Calendar 2.0, and kink-friendly authors will get to showcase Christmas-themed books. Best of luck!

    (If you don’t have Christmas books but still want to participate, there will also be slots for that!)

    • Thanks, Anastasia! I had one out last year so I’m hoping to make it two in a row. *fingers crossed* My rope story will be out around then too . . . hmmm, maybe I’ll send Ross & Miles to play at Ana’s house. 🙂

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